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moovok
March 18th, 2001, 03:36 PM
Hope you like this people. I used this starter on a Short Story Writing Course. I wonder where I can go from here. Any ideas, please post! <u><FONT COLOR="red">May be grusome!!!</u></FONT c> http://www.3dgladiators.net/forums/ubb/ubbhtml/smile.gif If you don't like spiders, look away too :P

<center><FONT size="4">Darkness Falls</center></FONT s>

The hammer hit the hard wood with ease, as he held the cable in place as she bashed the cable stapels in place.
The carpet wasn't placed on the landing or the stairs below her. She sat down, as she hammered the nails in.
She looked as she bashed it in, looking at dust pouring out of the seams where the landing came over the stairs.
The stairs were small and went straight up from the ground floor and at the top turned nighty degrees to be positioned perfectly on the landing, which lead into the three bedrooms and one bathroom on the top floor.
The child from out of one of the bedrooms crawled along and looked into a large crack in one of the landing floorboards.
He looked into the dark abyss, looking to find what was burried under the floorboards below.
As he moved his hand away from the hole and sat on the chair, a large tentacle able to fit out of the hole poked out and then went back into the dark hole.
The hammer kept being bashed, as she still noticed the black dust spraying out from the landing.
She stop suddenly, and looked as the dust kept on pouring out of the hole, without no help fom the hammer.
It became a waterfall of black dust after a while, as she moved back on the stairs.
From out of the wood, several thousand spiders poured out, each one carrying a large bulb on their back, and eight deadly tentacles which had spikes which were pointed away from the end and towards the body of the spider.
She looked down, as her whole body was covered and screamed. Each spider pierced her skin, pouring blood out of her body which trickled down the stairs.
The child on the stairs was the next to get attacked by the spiders, which now started to fall from the attic above him, dropping into his hair and onto his face. Some started walking into his mouth, as the pain in his eyes were too much.
The bottom of the stairs turned into a river of blood, as the spiders returned back into their nests.

- Michael Rouse-Deane

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- Mikey
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McC
March 18th, 2001, 03:46 PM
Creepy...I'd rephrase your first sentence...too many repititons of the same kind of structure in it. Also, all the shes and hes and what-nots gets a bit confusing. However, it's good...well, if you like creepy http://www.3dgladiators.net/forums/ubb/ubbhtml/wink.gif

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