@evil_genius: I think you just supplied all the help I need
I was wondering if the scene as described would work.
Believe me when I tell you that the folks over at SFM were presenting wild and very un-Treklike ideas (the Fitzgerald diving into the atmosphere, Warbirds decloaking directly above the consulate building, stuff that you'd expect to see in Stargate SG-1 or Star Wars.) It was attempting to make the scene more complicated than it needed to be.
...but come to think of it, I just thought of an excellent plot twist to end the scene with that will tie in quite neatly to the rest of the story.
