[Bryguy]

Thank you for the tips guys, let's see if I can get this to work...

And most of all, nothing in the ready room could compare to the powerful visual of the holodeck shutting down, and Garr telling Prentice that "This is all we'll be left with if we don't stop Drakus" as they stand in the empty room.

You are absolutely right. Forget what I said about moving it to the quarters or ready room, the holodeck itself is the best place for this to happen. Although I still would suggest you reconsider the first minute of the sequence. In the end, I know that this is your baby, if you feel the scene is best served with a theme song, then by all means keep it there.

About one of the revelations...

Spoiler You were correct in your reply to me regarding knowledge of the prime timeline. Did I miss something? I'm not sure how Holo Garr, would have any knowledge of the prime timeline since the events at the end of Specter. In fact, how would any of them? Even Prentice doesn't seem phased by this little detail. Did someone pull a Nero and go back and change the timeline....again? My head hurts now.

Overall, I thought it was a great scene. I look forward to more.